Script Drafting #1

This is my first draft of a script -



INT. BEDROOM – DAY

RUBY browses through dressing room draws. Hunts through bundles of clothes.


                         RUBY (GROANING)
                          Where is it?!
                     How can it not be here?

RUBY slams draw shut. Scavenges through next draw down fishing the purple scarf from on top and throws across the room. Scarf floats only one-quarter of the way. RUBY races across the room to a closet. The door creaks on its hinges. RUBY grabs random clothing and holds it up against her body in the long mirror.

                         RUBY (SIGHING)
                      That will have to do.

The digital clock on the bedside table then ticks on 20 minutes. RUBY is sat a dressing table applying perfume, body lotion and make-up. RUBY proceeds to pick out a nail varnish, choosing a deep purple.





EXT. STREET – DAY



RUBY saunters down the street pretending to be oblivious of passersby’s . 

                   RUBY (VO)
It takes a lot of effort to look good. In fact sometimes it’s too much effort, but it has to be done. I know guys notice me; I mean what else would they be staring for? My make-up is never smudged, I mean never! That is just a no. I like to describe myself as fabulously contemporary. If I don’t keep up with trend then no one can. Not to be rude to others but I believe that I create the ‘In-Styles’ I always wear the latest fashions first.



RUBY suddenly freezes as she unexpectedly notices a familiar face. One that she has not seen in years, also a face she did not want to see. The mystery male stares at her filling the space between them with undying tension.



During a run through of the script I was able to hear if my script work and how I could improve it. After I was given feedback to what everyone thought was good and was asked any questions.
The comment was made that Ruby's first line "Where is it?!" is not necessarily need, to which I agree because actions by actor demonstrate this, so within my next edit it will be removed.

The significance of the colour purple was also questioned. Purple symbolises Royalty, Power, Luxury and Ambition. A light purple evokes romantic and nostalgic feelings, whereas a dark purple evokes gloom and can cause frustration. I chose purple because it will symbolise Ruby's vulnerability. Though she seems to be very selfish and carefree she is just masking her true feelings because she is actually unstable in thoughts, so she wants to take pride in something.